Honestly my name is Christian Diyonata Lintin Andoea. My parents name is Jonathan Machiavelly Andoea and Ludi Hari Prihatini. I'm half of Torajanese and Javanese, I usually called it as Torajava. I was born in small town called Ambarawa, and I grew in the middle of military family. My grandpa from my father was the leader of National Police School in Banyubiru, and my grandpa from my mom was a special force.I am a bad kid with a million idea to bother someone, and actually where ever I am there is will be a trouble. I had a lot of problem since I was child, but now I became more adult, but still love to make a trouble. I spent my childhood time to have a good education from Kupang 01 Ambarawa elementary school (it's the name of the school in Ambarawa not in Kupang), Pangudi Luhur Ambarawa Junior High School, Negeri 1 Ambarawa Senior High School, and now I'm in Satya Wacana Christian University. i left my dedication and made a lot of histories in every school that I joined, but there is too many bad histories, and hopefully now I can make a better one in Satya Wacana Christian University.
I start my stories in Satya Wacana by taking English Education Program. Why I took this program? because this is the only one program that I know and like. In this program, I have passed a lot of classes since I joined to this program in 2015. Everyday I learned about English but still have some problem in reading and writing, fortunately I have a good grades on writing. Writing is hard for me because sometimes I got an error grammar and lack of creativity to make a good writing, but I will work hard on it.
In the future, I really want to improve my skill in writing and my grammar, so I can make a good writing. I will try it to make it better by taking writing for media class. Hopefully iI got a good grade too in this class.
I'm so pissed off now, I've been trying to comment on your blog for 4 times and it did back automatically. So, now I'll try my best to comment on you again.
BalasHapusHere are some mistakes that I found in your writing
1. My parents name is Jonathan Machiavelly Andoea and Ludi Hari Prihatini
2. I'm half
3. actually where ever I am there is will be a trouble. (You need a coma here)
4. I became more adult, (use another word rather than more adult)
5. i left my dedication
My advice :
I know you did very well in writing, but you need some improvement, well we still have a long way to reach a perfection. Then, let's pass this semester seriously and have a time to practice more and more. Cheers!
a little bit suggest :
Try to improve your vocabulary then you know the proper word to use for your essay later, then avoid to translate Indonesian sentence to English sentence, because it will make your essay looks weird and be careful to link one sentence to others, you need a conjuction.
Thank you Vidy for your comments, it will help me a lot.
BalasHapusHay Cristian,
BalasHapus1. It is a good greetings Christian, you begin with introduce yourself and talk about your previous school.Also you mentioned with an interesting title. For the challenges that you have related with the writing course, if I may suggest you said that sometimes you still have problem in writing especially with the grammar. My suggestion is we must learn about grammar deeply by read and answer the exercise in the book ,ask our friend to help us and don't be afraid to make a mistake. I think every student have a same problem with you.
2. By reading your greetings above, you tells us about your effort. you gives us a good example , if we want to achieve something we must have an effort on it. To make it clear my advice is if you want to achieve something, don't forget to do it all with your spirit and your heart. We are still learning, so it is fine to make a mistake.
3. From you greetings above, my suggestion for your greeting related with the sentences. The first one is in this sentence " writing is hard for me because sometimes I got an error grammar " if I may suggest you can change it into " writing is very hard for me because I found some errors grammar on it."
The second one is about "i" it should be in a capital latter.
Thank You
Thank you Adna for your comment it will help me a lot
HapusGreetings to you Cristian!
BalasHapusI do suggest you not to write a "too long" sentence to avoid grammatical mistakes:
* am a bad kid with a million idea to bother someone, and actually where ever I am there is will be a trouble.
In that case, you can re-write it into two different sentences. Besides, I suggest you not to mix tenses within a sentence:
*Writing is hard for me because sometimes I got an error grammar and lack of creativity to make a good writing, but I will work hard on it.
I wish all the best for your study, Christian!
Thank you sir for your advises, it help me a lot.
Hapus